Struggling Authors

Hello,

We have received an entry for the Writer's Block section (below) and, as English is not their first language, the author requires a little help. Please offer some constructive criticism where possible and remember to explain why something needs changing.

Many thanks

Wolf and Tina had enough of strugling to keep the Castle that have inherited going, by letting rooms to writers painters and variouw other artists. They were getting old, both their children have died, their son 10 years ago on a motorbike accident, their daughter to cancer.They made a pack...one night when the last guest departed, they hugged in front of the open lroom fire whilst the gas fumes gave an end to their most sad lives... A nurse that was coming regularly to check on Wolf"s heart weakness found a note, it read. Nothing can replace the children.... They waited long enough for us.... We are joining them soon for a reunion surprise party.... Forgeive us for wanting to be together...xxx

I quickly found myself passing over the language barrier in the story and becoming captured by the story that unfolded. It was sad but it was a satisfying ending.
I have made a few revisions to the punctuation and suggested other changes.

Wolf and Tina had enough of strugling to keep the Castle that have inherited going, (A split infinitive here. ......to keep the castle going... I would then have another short sentence about the inherited nature of the castle, either before or after. Spelling - 'strug(g)ling')

by letting rooms to writers painters and variou(s) other artists. They were getting old. Both their children had died: their son 10 years ago on a motorbike accident, their daughter to cancer.They made a pact...one night when the last guest departed, they hugged in front of the open room fire whilst the gas fumes gave (I suggest 'brought')an end to their most sad lives... A nurse that was coming regularly to check on Wolf"s heart weakness found a note. It read: Nothing can replace the children.... They waited long enough for us.... We are joining them soon for a reunion surprise party.... Forgive us for wanting to be together...xxx

Grayling

Hello,

This is one way of doing it... but it's only my opinion.

Wolf and Tina [struggled] to keep the Castle [they] inherited going, by letting rooms to writers painters and variou[s] other artists. They were getting old [and] both [of] their children ha[d] died[;] their son, 10 years ago [in] a motorbike accident[;] their daughter to cancer. They made a [pact] [and] one night[,] when the last guest departed, they hugged in front of the open room fire [and] the gas fumes gave an end to their sad lives.
A nurse that [came] regularly to check on Wolf"s heart weakness found a note, it read[:]
"Nothing can replace the children.... They waited long enough for us.... We are joining them soon for a reunion surprise party.... Forgive us for wanting to be together...xxx"

Hope this helps

DS